ESSAYS III UNIT 4 Ensayos: tarea final

ESSAYS III UNIT 4 Ensayos: tarea final

ESSAYS III
UNIT 4
Ensayos: tarea final
Escriba un ensayo/redacción de 350 palabras incluyendo los siguientes
puntos:
La revolución tecnológica y las Fuerzas Armadas
- Describa los efectos a los que ha dado lugar la revolución tecnológica
en el ámbito de las Fuerzas Armadas (nivel 2)
- ¿Cuál cree que es el elemento más importante dentro de las Fuerzas
Armadas: su poder humano o su poder tecnológico? Argumente su
respuesta (nivel 3)
- Analice cuál habría sido el papel de España en las últimas décadas en
el ámbito internacional si se hubiera llevado a cabo un mayor esfuerzo
en investigación tecnológica. (nivel 3)
Recuerde que debe escribir 5 párrafos. Uno para la introducción, otro para la
conclusión y otros tres donde lleve a cabo lleve a cabo cada una de las tres
tareas que se le indican más arriba (una tarea en cada párrafo).
Preste mucha atención a las tareas que se le piden. Recuerde que en el
segundo punto se le pide argumentar, y que la última tarea consiste en
especular. Asegúrese de que está llevando a cabo las tareas previstas.
In the last fifty years society has been continually shaken year in year out
by new discoveries as a consequence of the technological revolution and
research. Evidently, the Armed Forces have not been indifferent to these
technological influences.
First, we can say that the fast rhythm that technology has imposed to
armies as a result of innovations has brought benefits in almost all aspects.
Nations have had to invest a lot of money to keep up their armies to the
pace of modern times. Those who haven’t done it yet, won’t play an
accurate role in each time more and more demanding missions.
Comentario: I would write EITHER
continually OR year in year out, but not both
at the same time; they basically mean the same.
Comentario: The correct preposition after
impose is on
Comentario: To keep their armies up with
the pace of modern times.
Comentario: Instead of accurate, I would
say a significant role.
Comentario: Better…the human factor
overweighs technology.
To weigh is a verb; weight is a noun.
Comentario: self-confident
Although material and manpower must be considered equally important for
the fulfillment of armies’ missions, from my point of view the human
element overweights technology . To begin with, if we do not have skilled
soldiers, following orders from wise generals and self confident leaders,
without the concurrence of all these we surely will not obtain any success.
On the other hand, if we only rely on people and we do not provide them
with the up to the minute technology we are condemning them to failure. I
am sure that a balanced mixture of values and tech-weaponry is
synonymous with mighty war machine.
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Comentario: I would erase these words.This
idiomatic expression does not sound right in the
middle of a conditional type sentence.
Comentario: Word order: we will surely
never obtain…
Comentario: Erase the, up-to-the-minute
Comentario: I would say combination.
Comentario: You could say high-tech
weaponry.
Comentario: …synonymous of a mighty war
machina.
ESSAYS III
UNIT 4
Spain is an important a part in the International Community that she plays
an influential a role, that she shares and shoulders part of the international
burden. Nevertheless a greater and steady effort could have been better
done to improve research, development and innovation, sectors in which our
country has been prolific, but in which she has not properly invested funds.
We have in some sense mistaken our way, because if Spain had been more
generous with our scientific community, if she had budgeted more funds to
research, Spain would surely have had more specific weight in European and
world policies, which in the long term would have produced an earlier
recovery from our economic meltdown.
To sum up, technology and war are opposite sides of the same coin and are
closely related and without whose concurrence neither the society nor the
Armed Forces will obtain their development requirements.
Comment: Good effort. Even the construction of some sentences is
awkward, I can understand all the ideas you develop. You need to be more
precise with vocabulary and learn to use some prepositions.
Grade: 2+
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Comentario: I would say Spain plays an
important role in the international community
and shares part of the burden in international
conflicts.
Do not capitalize international community.
The correct personal pronoun for Spain is it.
Comentario: Erase better, it doesn’t fit in this
context.
Comentario: it
Comentario: Erase comma.
Comentario: Change to semicolon (;)
Comentario: …it had allocated more funds
for…
Comentario: Start a new sentence: Without
their concurrence neither society…
Comentario: Erase the.
Comentario: Better…the development each
requires.